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'Fractured Voices..' by ~Elmara:iconElmara:



BLACK

She is the sleek, sleek night
With the sweet scent of something
Ineffable in the air with so
Many, many starry, wide-open
Eyes all aflame and burning
And an almost audible
Guitar-string
Twang of the turgid tension tonight
Oh but she is the night!
And I am but one more sordid satanic
Follower of her forgotten faith…

RED

I broke the bastard’s teeth
When he told me he thought I
Was selling out
But that was in my head
Where I saw red
Actually I just nodded and
Got another Coke from the
‘fridge

BLUE

Blue tastes of rain on his
Upturned, undefeated lips
As he smiles
(Or rather smirks?)
As I
Prattle on and on about
All the pretty, pretty boys
And all their pretty, dainty ways
Making him smile his spider smile
As the rain paints shadows on our eyes
He promises me
The bluest of eternities
In the midnight of his smile
(Or was it smirk?)
Who am I to say?
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`And as he smirks, I am forced to admit that Christ, I hate the bastard.

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:iconpaul-cooper:
Wow, I love this. You have a genuine talent for poetry. Keep it up. =)
:iconbabrus:
BLUE!!!!!

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. My mind is not a nice place to be :batman:
:iconelmara:
:giggle:

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconelmara:
thanks :)

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconnesquarx:
You're getting a knack for this sort of sentiomorphic abstractions of word concepts eh?
Darn good at it you are...

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:iconelmara:
thankus muchus :D im trying new things these days.. -fingers crossed-

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconfataldaiquiri:
love it! =D

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:iconpuremind:
Black is excellent, follows your signature style. The guitar part was a little....?

Red and blue could use some work. For some reason, i dont think the more aggressive style of writing works. Why not something more subtle like Black?

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool

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