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Background image thanks to :iconvenommistress: 'Foggy Forest Blue'

`My first attempt at visual poetry.

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:iconhassansagheer:
fuck yaar, this is just too great
:iconelmara:
:D

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconmelba92:
really great *.*

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And I find it kind of funny
I find it kind of sad
The dreams in which I’m dying are the best I’ve ever had
:iconelmara:
thank you so much :heart:

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconinspirational-dreams:
:ahoy:Congratulations, this deviation has been featured in my journal as well as a news article you can find here [link] I encourage you to fav the news article to help spread the love within the community! :blowkiss:

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"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who
mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind."
- Dr. Seuss


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:iconelmara:
holy effing- :faint:
wow! thanks so much! really honored and appreciative. :w00t:

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconcharlottenguyen:
Is that from "Nostalgia" song by Nocturnal Depression?

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Try to be Cool, Look like a Fool
:iconelmara:
nope, its an original poem written by me a couple of years back. i turned it to a visual to update it :) haven't heard of this band though, sorry.

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:jedi: Dont Worry...Sith Happens :jedi:

The Poetry.. That comes from the squaring off between.. And the circling is worth it.. Finding beauty in the dissonance.. -Tool
:iconposhlost:
This is really striking as a visual poetry piece. Great composition. Again, the repetition and simplicity of your visual poetry (the poems that...become visual poetry) are strangely soothing and effective, even in this piece, when the topic is not really an optimistic one.

The last lines of "someone in my mind" seem somewhat cliche and not the strongest way to end the piece, and it worries me that I can't figure out how the title fits with the idea created through the poem. It just seems like two completely different emotions.

Regardless, this was thought-provoking, and thanks for writing.
J.

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"Odi et amo. Quare id faciam, fortasse requiris.
Nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior."
- Catullus
:iconelmara:
thanks very much :)
your words have really started to change my own perception of my work. :nod:

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